zebeck
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I'd like to take the opportunity to thank those of you involved in drafting the letter of petition from its conception to its creation.
I am happy to say that i have signed the petition.
I do however have one comment on the gross structure of the petition itself.
My point is minor but in the interest of ideal reprentation for the industry I think it should be noted.
There is a small techincality involving a disagreement of grammar in the following:
Be it also known we are aware that some of the aforementioned shipping companies have provided for some of their clients one or more of the following:
a) A written agreement/waiver for the shipping of Live Harmless Snakes
b) Are being granted a "blind eye" policy towards them using their services
c) Some businesses are allowed to utilize those services as local management exception-based decisions
(A) (B) and (C) do not have equal status as parts of speech.
(A) constitutes a phrase which logically completes the sentence which precedes the lettered sections.
(B) and (C) are independent clauses which presume to stand alone and not as a proper continuation of the sentence stated.
So I propose a small change.
Make (B) and (C) simple phrases (remove the verbs)
perhaps (B) could be re-worded as
" a blind eye policy toward..."
or "the granting of a blind eye toward..."
(C) could proceed likewise:
"an allowance to utilize services...."
In this way the otherwise well-formed letter can be made to conform to higher grammatical standards.
Please take this as a constructive criticism. I fully support this effort and would like very much to see it succeed.
Christian, is it possible to change the text of the petition at this point?
-rob zebeck
I am happy to say that i have signed the petition.
I do however have one comment on the gross structure of the petition itself.
My point is minor but in the interest of ideal reprentation for the industry I think it should be noted.
There is a small techincality involving a disagreement of grammar in the following:
Be it also known we are aware that some of the aforementioned shipping companies have provided for some of their clients one or more of the following:
a) A written agreement/waiver for the shipping of Live Harmless Snakes
b) Are being granted a "blind eye" policy towards them using their services
c) Some businesses are allowed to utilize those services as local management exception-based decisions
(A) (B) and (C) do not have equal status as parts of speech.
(A) constitutes a phrase which logically completes the sentence which precedes the lettered sections.
(B) and (C) are independent clauses which presume to stand alone and not as a proper continuation of the sentence stated.
So I propose a small change.
Make (B) and (C) simple phrases (remove the verbs)
perhaps (B) could be re-worded as
" a blind eye policy toward..."
or "the granting of a blind eye toward..."
(C) could proceed likewise:
"an allowance to utilize services...."
In this way the otherwise well-formed letter can be made to conform to higher grammatical standards.
Please take this as a constructive criticism. I fully support this effort and would like very much to see it succeed.
Christian, is it possible to change the text of the petition at this point?
-rob zebeck